Peer review letter

 Peer review letter:

 

Writer: Amanda Ortega

Reviewer: Uri Gonzalez

Writer, please identify any issues you feel you are currently having with this piece of writing so that your reader/reviewer can focus on these issues.

How well does the author set up the idea of place/event in this piece? Point to specific details that give the concept of character dimension or stifle it on the page.

The main idea is well placed but the complete essay is lacking of support, it could be something like scientific researches, or some quotation from another paper.

Are you able to get a clear sense of setting? How well do you feel situated in the environment of the piece? Explain how this feeling is achieved, citing details from the writing.

Personally, I am not the target reader of the essay, because I do not wear makeup, but the entire topic –The importance of ongoing training inside the makeup industry- is very important, as the techniques have been changing and being even more effectives.

Does the author give enough personal background to situate the importance of the place/event as well as his or her own point of view? If so, what details help the author do this? If not, what do you think is missing?

As Amanda has a YouTube channel with makeup content, the place/event is well known, and she gives some piece of advice in her essay but this is not enough to take the reader’s attention.

Does the piece seem to flow from beginning to end? Is there a natural progression of characters and story line? If so, how is this accomplished? If not, how can the author make the piece flow more effectively?

As the author are relating her own experiences, there is a natural flow throughout the story line, telling how she start and how is it going nowadays.

Where does the story begin, and where does the story leave you? Do you feel you are able to enter the narrative easily and let it end where it does? Why or why not?

The story begins at the point she start learning about makeup but it only stands in that, so it leaves me quickly.

Is there specific language that you feel is particularly expressive and effective in this piece? If so, point it out here.

Is there specific language that you feel is somewhat stilted or dragging the narrative pace? If so, point it out here.

Do you have any additional suggestions or comments for revision? Please also feel free to use this space to express what you like best about the piece of writing.