Amanda Ortega's essay (EDITING CHECKLIST)

 

ESSAY Peer Editing Checklist

Your Name: Uri Gonzalez

Name of Person You’re Evaluating: Amanda Ortega

Rate the following areas from 1-5, I being “Poor” or “Missing” and 5 being “Excellent.” If you give it a “3” or below, please offer your partner a suggestion for how to improve. You may write on this sheet and/or on your partner’s story.

REQUIREMENTS	RATING	SUGGESTIONS
Effective narrative hook as first paragraph	1  2  3  4  5	She could give some data about the gap in employees’ skills to support her opening paragraph and hooking the reader.
Clearly and effectively structured	1  2  3  4  5	The thesis statement is not clear, and in some cases, there is no connection between ideas.
Concluding sentence(s) provide a sense of resolution	1  2  3  4  5	The last paragraph gives some solutions to the problem, but it must be more detailed.
Strong verbs and adjectives	1  2  3  4  5
Clear setting that invokes a definite mood	1  2  3  4  5
Clear point of view	1  2  3  4  5
Ideas keep the reader interested	1  2  3  4  5	Again, there is a lack of supporting data to make a more credible essay.
The essay has purpose.	1  2  3  4  5
Grammar & formatting errors are not a distraction from overall effectiveness	1  2  3  4  5	There are some grammar errors which take the attention away, and confuses the reader.

 

What are the strengths of this piece? Be clear and specific.

The draft is on a good path, it has a specific idea, and uses interesting concepts and but needs more data to support the ideas.